Full Lips Fuller Commentary Track Pt 2

 

Hello Readers,

So with Full Lips Fuller now in the can I am able to finish my commentary on this story.  This was a fun story to write and has been on the back burner for quite some time (New Year's Eve of last year to be exact).  So let's start with the next chapter.

Chapter 6: Sienna  II - So as I previously stated, Sienna was slated for the Prom chapter and the events that transpired here (the pair making love for the first time) would have occurred there.  

However, my original idea (once I moved Sienna up) for around this time was to have a poll to see which of all of the girls (minus Tori for reasons that should be more obvious now).  I posted a link on my blog leading to a test poll and of the 300 plus hits I've gotten over 3 sites I got a measly 5 votes.  With that kind of response my plans to let the readers decide who would be Jackson's prom date went out the window.  

Chapter 7: Rocki -  So this chapter was originally not in the planning stages when I first started writing.  I added it in to actually give Rocki some screen time.  Up until this point in time, I have been writing around Rocki, implying that she was active without actually writing many of the details.  Now, I love Rocki, I truly believe that she is Jackson's other half, his soulmate.  With that said, I felt the need to branch out and give others a chance as in the long run (unless she dies) they will end up together.

Chapter 8: Tori -  Now to be fair to Tori, she doesn't appear (on the outside) to be capable of what I have planned for her.  With that said, I needed a girl once I came up with the bet subplot that was a bit duplicitous.  I had no idea what to do with Tori that would be different prior to Chapter 5 but again, that changed with the subplot and I decided to make her the "very aggressive" girl.  She wants to win the bet and was willing to go all the way to do so (literally).

Sienna puts her in her place revealing her relationship with Jackson in the process.  This also showed that Casey and Trinity were the other two members of the bet.  The subplot was not mentioned in the last 2 chapters as it is (eventually) going to be addressed in the next story (if I write it).

Chapter 9: Chelsey II -  The Prom... as I said I was originally going to let you the readers determine who was going to be here.  I will admit, I was pulling for Chelsey the entire time but would have abided by the decision.

I would have written alternate chapters for the other girls (save Sienna and Tori) that had slight variations but the original would be the cannon one.

The chapter ends with Jackson and Chelsey having had sex and Jackson accidentally revealing that he and Sienna are closer than Chelsey realized.  Their relationship is strained and Jackson is very remorseful as deep down he knows that he is in love with Chelsey.

Chapter 10: Season Finale - So, I picked the title as a red herring.  I tend to list the chapter titles long before they are posted so I wanted the fans to think thank one of Jackson's ladies would be joining the family and it is in reference to Danielle's arrival.

This chapter plays out very much like the episode save for Jackson, Rocki, Ramona, and Chelsey.  The goal for this chapter was to get Jackson and Chelsey on better terms, much like the episode originally smoothed out some of the tension between Jackson and Rocki in the series.  Rocki knows that by not becoming exclusive with Jackson he has grown in experience and now has other options besides herself.  She regrets her choices but knows at this moment it is not her time and decides to help one of her contemporaries as Jackson seems to care about her (Chelsey) the most.

The story ends with the possibility that Chelsey is pregnant, something that I will deal with if I tell my next story.

My Outline for Full Lips Fuller

Chapter 6: Rocking the Boat – Sienna 2 (Addition)

While out with one of his other girls Jackson runs into Ramona and Rocki who are having a girl's night out.

• (Addition) It's Valentine's Day.

• Ramona spots Jackson with Sienna and tries to keep it from Rocki.

• Rocki sees Jackson with Sienna.

• Rocki and Jackson come face=to-face while he is with his date.

• Sienna kisses Jackson in front of everyone in the restaurant.

• Rocki puts on a brave face but deep down she cares for Jackson and is jealous.

• Jackson however takes Rocki at face value as that is what she always says she wants.

• (addition) Sienna brings Jackson back to her house as her family is out of town for the weekend.

• Jackson and Sienna make love, both are/were virgins.

Chapter 7: Family & Friendly Matters

Ramona and Sienna each talk to Jackson about Valentine's day.

• Ramona hunts down her surrogate brother to find out what is going on with him.

• Jackson admits some facts to Ramona that he doesn't share with anyone.

• He tells Ramona that he thinks he might be in love with Sienna.

• Rocki follows Jackson to his MMA training the next day and watches him train.

• Rocki and Jackson get together and she presses him but Jackson stops and has to tell Rocki that he and Sienna are close and he has to refrain.

Chapter 8: Nocturnal Activities – Tori & Sienna 3

Ramona is having a sleepover at her father's recently re-renovated house.

• Casey, Trinity, Coco, Chelsey, Tori, and Sienna are guests at Ramona's home.

• Tori skips the party and makes her way to the Fuller house. Jackson is home alone.

• Tori propositions Jackson but he is less than enthused to participate. She strips in front of him but Jackson turns her away.

• Sienna arrives and the two make love (again) before Sienna has to return to the party.

• The next day Tori, Trinity, and Casey get together to discuss the status of the bet as Tori said she would be the winner post slumber party.

Chapter 9: The Prom - Chelsey 2

Prom season is here. Jackson is torn as he does not know who to ask of the five girls that he is involved with. Things are further complicated when Sienna asks Jackson to the Prom.

• Sienna won't be in town for Prom (not happy).

• Chelsey asks Jackson to go to prom with her upon learning Sienna's plans (change)

• Jackson has to tell the others about his prom plans.

• The girls reluctantly get other dates.

• Chelsey and Jackson go to an after-party where the punch is spiked.

• The pair end up at Sienna's (who lives nearby) when the party is raided. (addition)

• A tipsy Jackson and Chelsey make love.

Chapter 10: Welcome to the Family

It is 2 weeks after the prom. Kimmy, Stephanie, and DJ go to see Hamilton. Someone joins the family.

• All events save Jackson & Ramona happen as the episode presents.

• Chelsey is at Ramona's home talking while Rocki stops at the Fuller house looking for Ramona.

• Jackson and the three girls drive to the hospital to witness the baby's birth.

• Chelsey holds Jackson's hand during the baby's birth which leads to Jackson holding her.

• Rocki and Chelsey leave at the end of the story. During the ride, Chelsey tunes out Rocki as she places her hands on her abdomen, worried she might be in the hospital in the not-so-distant future.