Camp Blood Final Commentary (Finally)
Hello Readers.
Sorry for the delay in posting this final bit of business for my story. As the few of you that read this know, I was greatly annoyed by the lack of feedback over my Camp Blood series. It doesn't bother me that I don't get as many hits as my normal dramas, what bothers me is that I take my time to craft these stories and I only heard from one person regularly and another review from a very busy person at the start but none of the rest shared their thoughts.
As I've said before, your comments are what drives me. If you are reading the story, let me know what you think. It doesn't have to be after every chapter (especially when the story is complete) but giving me nothing makes me want to quit writing. So that is also the reason I didn't complete the commentary until now.
Chapter 6
So the story starts from Ben's point of view as he hasn't joined the others in the hall but hears the music blaring from the PA system. He goes to see what is going on and we cut to Rocki who is still in shock from seeing Brady and Gina's fate.
The pair witness Lola being thrown through the hall window before Jason makes his presence known to the pair. He quickly dispatches Lola and engages Ben who seems to get the upper hand until he manages to knock off Jason's mask. It is heavily implied that Ben knows who this is. Jason knows who is as not only has he been watching the camp all summer but the two were campers during the summer that Jason supposedly drowned. As such Jason makes Ben's death a painful and brutal demise.
The next part was the hardest for me to write as it was the Cat and Mouse scenario that is typical of slashers and I have never written one quite like this. I tried to convey how dire the situation was for Rocki. Originally it played out similar to how I did it in Cruel Summer but as I did it that way (and again for Sienna) I had to come up with something new.
So Rocki starts out hiding in typically the last place Jason should expect her to go, Brady and Gina's death site. Jason does go in there but because Rocki has done an excellent job of not disturbing the bodies nor leaving any hint that she was on that side of the room Jason does not disturb his handy work as he knows there are at least two more counselors and the scare tactic should alert him to their presence in the cabin if they come in.
Rocki does eventually hide in the woods (again) but logistically it's the smartest place to hide. She is slowly trying to make her way to Jackson's cabin and she is saved from a grave injury by Jackson who has been working his way through the woods disarming Jason's traps (primarily bear traps).
Outside of his cabin, Jackson uses a tablet to check the security feeds to find Jason which is also the first time that Rocki is clued in that there is more to Jackson being here than she realized. I also cover that Jason is using many of the techniques that he learned from Mike Manning during his previous summer at Camp Crystal Lake. I also go into a little bit about what Jackson and Sienna did during their spare time between ages 16 - 18. The chapter ends with the pair reaching Jackson's front door, unlocking it, and an Ax coming down on Rocki's head.
Chapter 7
The final chapter of the story arch. Jackson sees the ax coming and manages to react quickly enough to save Rocki from being killed by her own friend. Once safely inside Rocki is further clued into the things Jackson and Coco have been hiding from her about Jackson's cabin. The biggest surprise is that Jackson discovers that his "mystery bag" mentioned in Chapter 2 is missing.
Coco and Rocki snuck it out in retribution after Jackson's Dare to Rocki to go jump in the lake naked. What Rocki didn't know was that the bag contained three 12 gauge shotguns. Coco admits to taking them and hiding them in the barn which pisses Jackson off to no end as Jason is currently tearing the barn apart looking for them.
Originally the encounter was going to end in the Range Cabin with Jackson Rocki and Coco finishing him off. I realized while I liked the ending it wasn't harrowing enough if Jackson had access to the weapons the whole time. I then needed a way to get the weapons out of the cabin without Jackson knowing about it. As he only had the "Just in Case" it's not like he pulled them out every night while he watched the monitors. So I inserted the Truth or Dare game to give a reason why Coco would help Rocki (who didn't even know about the guns) hide them. Coco planned to explain to Rocki when they returned the weapons but as it had not come up yet, there was no need.
Taking the shotgun shells (which Jackson kept separate from the weapons) the trio makes their way to the area where Ethan and Ashlyn were killed. While Jackson and Coco argue Rocki discovers a fishing line rigged near the area. The cable serves as a warning signal to Jason while he is in hiding. Following the line, the trio discovers the entrance to Jason's underground lair. This is how he has remained unseen for so long.
Exploring Jason's dwelling, Jackson comes face to face with Dee from the Prologue. Dee is not only not dead but she reveals that the reason she is alive is that she is Jason's younger sister. Jason realized this before delivering the fatal blow to her head and abducted her as she was his sole remaining family member and because she looks so much like their mother.
Rocki does not trust her but Jackson does and the quartet makes their way through the tunnels to the exit nearest the barn. Meanwhile, Jason has ransacked Jackson's cabin and found a message Jackson left him informing him that Jackson was one of the two responsible for killing his mother. This enrages him even further and he goes through the camp again searching for his mother's killer.
Originally when I moved the final scene from the cabin to the barn (good symmetry there, Jason and his mother meeting their end in the same structure) I added the 4th survivor who at the time was not Denise. Reminder, I mapped out this story before I crafted the original story. The 4th survivor was originally going to be a look-a-like of his mother (like in the Friday the 13th reboot) but when I invented Denise and made her mother the original killer, well the story just wrote itself at that point.
So Jackson and Denise do their best to hold off Jason while Coco and Rocki go about getting the shotguns. I did my best to craft a believable scenario where it took Coco a bit of time to get the weapons to draw out the tension.
Of course, once the weapons were in hand the finale is never in doubt. My Jason is a mortal, not a zombie/Frankenstein so when the doors come open the weapons are locked and loaded and Jason is shot to pieces.
I do let the reader think that something might happen as Jackson and Denise stand watch besides Jason's body.
Epilogue
So originally I was going to make the Epilogue a one-shot but decided to just add it into this story because by this point I wasn't getting feedback so there was no point in going through the hassle of setting up the one-shot over the 3 websites I post on. It was far easier just to tack on another chapter and be done with it.
My epilogue is a nice bit of family drama as we see that Jackson made it home to Sienna. The two have three children who at the start of the story are teens. The two have never told their children about Camp Crystal Lake but the trio has learned about it via a set of movies that detail the events of the two stories.
The three children are:
Michaela Ashlyn: 18 and named in honor of Michael Manning and Ashlyn Neilson.
Ethan Robert: 16 and named in honor of Ethan and Popko.
Sydney Melinda: 14 named in honor of Sienna's friends Sydney James and Melinda Craven
The family watches the two movies together with Jackson and Sienna filling in the gaps that are not detailed in the movies.
I covered the events immediately after Chapter 7 so we see the fate of the greedy owner (or you get a good idea of what's to come).
I then time jump to twenty or so years to the point where Jackson and Sienna are grandparents. I cover the story of how their children became parents and yes, I gave Ethan Fuller more coverage than either of his sisters but I felt he was the more interesting of the trio I created so, that was that.
The story ends with one of the grandkids asking why they don't go camping to which Jackson promises to do so when they are older so as not to scare/scar them.
So the story ends on a happy note (of course).
Now for your viewing pleasure here is my outline for the series that I worked from and see some of the subtle changes I made along the way:
Fuller House: Long Night at Camp Blood
Overview: 15-year-old Jackson is a summer camp counselor at Camp Crystal Lake. The only other person he knows there is Sienna Logan, the popular It girl at his high school. It is the end of summer and the kids are all gone. As the counselors close up for the summer they begin to disappear, one by one. He and Sienna are the last surviving counselors. All of the staff have been killed off by a deranged woman who blames all counselors for the death of her son. The two successfully stop the serial killer. Unknown to them the death is witnessed by her long thought dead son.
Jackson Fuller: Protagonist – He is 15 years old and currently single. Took the job for the money and as a way to forget about Rocki. Steve's roommate.
Sienna Logan: The reigning IT girl of Bayview High. As punishment for running up a large credit card bill, her parent has her take the job as a camp counselor to pay off the debt. Victoria's roommate.
Steve Cunningham (Spencer Bosman): The Jock. A high school athlete heading to college on a football scholarship. Jackson's roommate.
Melinda Craven (Paris Berlec): Female Jock. Melinda is kind to everyone but has very little tolerance for Steve. Is the lover and roommate of Sydney.
John Craven (Mateus Ward): Jokester Jake's Roommate and Melinda's brother.
Victoria Vanderwalt (Bella Thorne): Cheerleader. The snob of the counselors. Not as well off as Sienna but makes up for it with more toxic attitude. Sienna's roommate.
Mike Manning (Tyrel Jackson): The Smart Alec. John's Roommate.
Sydney James (Allie DeBerry): Cute Girl is generally sweet to all of her fellow counselors save Victoria. Is the lover and Roommate of Melinda.
Paula Vorhees (Lauren Graham): The former cook at Camp Crystal Lake. Her son apparently drowned in Crystal Lake. She killed the counselors directly responsible for his death. She was determined to keep the camp closed but became ill the previous year and could not halt the reconstruction and opening of the camp. She attacks the camp on the anniversary of Jason's birthday.
Outline
Prologue (Complete)
The scene rehashes Jackson and Rocki's breakup during Season 4 Finale.
The story picks up after Danielle's birth but Rocki clarifies the status and further states she is not going to be around during the summer. Jackson takes a job for the summer
As they ride in the reader gets the location, Camp Crystal Lake.
Chapter 1: Prelude to the Long Night (Complete)
It is Friday the 13th and the campers have been sent home.
The staff enjoys the beginning of their break until Sunday Afternoon.
Couples revealed to be Steven & Victoria, Melinda & Sydney
Jackson and Sienna have grown close.
John Craven is killed with an ax by an unseen figure.
Chapter 2: The Long Night Begins (Complete)
Jackson is quite the archer
Dinner Time, John is missing
Mike, Jackson, and Sienna clean up while the lovers go off on their own.
Steven and Victoria take shelter in the farthest cabin from the main hall, the couple has sex.
Steven is killed first.
Victoria finds John's head in the closet and while running for Steven is killed. (Reverse knife thrust to the heart.
Chapter 3: Stormy Night (Complete)
The final five-play games in the main hall during the storm.
When the heavy rain stops Melinda and Sydney decide to call it a night.
Sienna, Jackson, and Jake stay and play a different game.
Melinda and Sydney make love.
The killer strikes taking out both lovers at one time.
Chapter 4: Still of the Night (Complete)
The power goes out
The guys go to start the generator while Sienna cleans up the games and prepares a late-night snack.
The guys are attacked en route to the generator. Jackson is cut down and falls in the lake.
Jake is hit with an ax and fully impaled on it.
The power comes back on but no one returns.
Sienna finds Sydney & Melinda dead in their cabin.
Sienna finds Jake strung up on the generator.
Paula drives up and introduces herself to Sienna.
Chapter 5: Nights End (Complete)
Paula's motives are revealed and she tries to kill Sienna.
Sienna manages to get away from her assailant and is rescued by Jackson who did not die.
Sienna drops down from the perch above the barn main door with a rope tied in a noose. Once in place, Jackson drops down and hangs the killer up snapping her neck. However Sienna sees a twitch from the supposedly dead woman so she grabs the machete and decapitates her.
Jackson and Sienna huddled up in the barn as the sun rises. The two bonded in a way they never would have expected.
Two Weeks later two powerline workers are checking the lines leading to the camp before they call it a day. The first disappears and the second encounters a man that kills him with an ax to the head. Dragging the bodies into the woods first he goes to the truck to scavenge for supplies and finds a hockey mask that he places on his head replacing a sack.
Cast Kill Count
John Craven (Mateus Ward): Jokester – Killed in the woods while setting up a prank. Hatchet in the head.
Steve Cunningham (Spencer Bosman): The Jock: Killed after sex with Victoria. Goes to take a shower and gets strung up and shot with arrows.
Victoria Vanderwalt (Bella Thorne): Cheerleader: Thinks she hears something in the closet. Goes to see and finds John's head on a shelf. Reverse knife thrust in the heart.
Melinda Blair (Paris Berlec): Female Jock & Sydney James (Allie DeBerry): Cute Girl – The killer sneaks in through an open window on the ground floor. The girls are killed together while they are having sex. Speared to the bed through the heart, bleed out.
Jackson Fuller: Attacked from behind with an ax to the back. Drowns in the lake.* Jackson is faking it. The ax strike looks more deadly than it really is.
Mike Manning (Tyrel Jackson): The Smart Alec. Killed while investigating power outage with Jackson. Killer tosses an ax that strikes him in the back while he's running away. Axe then pushed through his body severing his heart.
The Killer: Paula Vorhees (Lauren Graham) – Beheaded by Sienna with her own machete.
Fuller House: Senior Prom (Complete)
Overview: It is Jackson's Senior year and he and his girlfriend of 3 years, Sienna Logan, are going to the Senior Prom. A lot has changed since the terrible incident at Camp Crystal Lake. Jackson has grown, Sienna has changed and many still have a hard time associating the woman they know now with the girl she once was.
Primary Characters: Jackson Fuller & Sienna.
Secondary Characters: Ramona Gibbler, Coco Davis,
New Characters
Ronald “Ronnie” Stevens (William Brent): Coco's date to the prom.
Paxton Windam (Charles Mason): Entitled Rich boy. Looks down on Jackson as he doesn't believe him to be worthy of Sienna. On very good terms with Sienna's father (same family circles).
Gina DeWitt (Lili Reinhart): The self-proclaimed It girl of Bayview High. Constantly trying to one-up Sienna who is no longer even trying to be the girl she once was.
Overview
Story begins as Coco & Sienna are waiting for their dates to the Prom.
Flashback to post LN@CB: The flashback explains what happened immediately after the murder spree and how Jackson and Sienna start their relationship.
Major Highlights: Despite not wanting to be on the ballot A large write-in campaign gets Jackson and Sienna elected Prom King and Queen. Losers storm off.
Everyone is going to the big after-party. Sienna however has other plans (love scene).
Fuller House: Curse of Camp Blood
The Cast
Jackson Fuller: One of only two survivors of the Camp Crystal Lake murders. Jackson is (at the start of the story) almost a graduated senior. He returns to the camp when many of his friends are planning to take summer jobs at the recently renovated Camp Crystal Lake.
Sienna Logan: The original “It” girl of Bayview High School, Sienna is a totally different girl than the one just three years ago. She and Jackson are the school's power couple. Not a primary character in this story.
Rocki Mahan: Rocki and Jackson dated during their freshman year of High School but broke up after the prom incident. She signs up as a counselor for the newly reopened Camp Crystal Lake.
Bobby Popko: Jackson's best friend. The class troublemaker. Camp Counselor.
Lola Wong: Jackson's former girlfriend and friend of Ramona. She has recently moved back into the area and is a counselor at Camp Crystal Lake.
Ethan Edwards: Former Post-its delivery guy. He took a job at the summer camp as part of a college course. Now dates Ashlyn.
Coco Davis: Sienna's best friend. Despite Sienna's insistence, she takes the job as a counselor.
Ashlyn Neilsen: Ramona's friend. Took the job before college. Dating Ethan.
Austin Brady: Former Bayview football captain. Working at the camp for the summer.
Ben Willis (Adam Baldwin): The Camp Owner
Bret Willis (Garret Wareing): Manager, Owners Son
Valerie Warren (Erika Chase): Manager, Owner's Niece.
Gina DeWitt (Lili Reinhart): Spoiled Rich Girl – Is spending the weekend on the lake with friends. Is invited to the camp by Brady who is looking to score.
Todd Williams (Jake Austin Walker): Denise's boyfriend.
Denise Kimble (Alexis B): Todd's boyfriend. Daughter of Paula, Sister of Jason.
Sam Finnley (Hunter Samson): Camper, a friend of Denise & Todd
Brenda Wyatt (Meg DeLacy): Camper, a friend of Denise & Todd
Outline
Prologue: March 13th, 2020 (Complete)
4 teens go camping near Crystal Lake.
Todd and Dee (Denise) go for a walk to the currently vacant Camp Crystal Lake.
Brenda and Sam have sex, they are interrupted by an unseen killer.
Todd and Dee are attacked at the campground. Todd is stabbed to death while Dee runs away.
Dee finds Brenda strung up but before she can save her the killer tosses a hatchet.
Dee comes face to face with the killer, the prologue ends with her impending death.
Chapter 1: Summertime Blues (Complete)
(May 14th, 2021) It is the third anniversary of the killing spree. Jackson and his girlfriend Sienna are on the cusp of completing High School.
Sienna is going to Europe as a graduation gift and she wants Jackson to go with her. Jackson is not sure what he is going to do until fate forces his hand.
Jackson and Sienna talk about Jackson's plan, the two make love as it will be the last time before the couple part ways for the summer.
Chapter 2: Returning to the Nightmare (Complete)
(June 6th, 2021) Jackson has returned to the one place he never wanted to in the hope he can keep those he cares about alive. While nothing has happened during the two years the camp was being renovated there have been disappearances in the surrounding area (ala Prologue).
The camp has only been mildly renovated since the last time he was here. The camp has Rural BB for emergencies and Jackson hacks into the Wifi and sets up cameras around the main area of the camp.
Story of Camp Blood is told. Jason's legend is revealed. Truth or Dare yeilds results.
Coco and Rocki play a long term prank on jackson.
Chapter 3: Summers End (Complete)
It is Aug 13th, 2021 and Camp is now closed.
Owner & Valerie haul out the horses. Bret is left in charge.
Gina arrives via a boat and is smitten by Brady. The two go off to get to know one another.
Ethan and Ashlyn are out for a walk and talking about Ethan's previous relationship with Ashlyn's good friend. The two trip an alarm setup by someone. The man emerges and attacks Ethan whose fate is not known. Ashlyn hits a booby trap and is killed.
Chapter 4: Bitter Sweet End (Complete)
Gina and Brady have sex.
While Gina is riding Brady cowgirl style she is bisected by the killer.
Brady covered in blood screams and is killed off pannel.
Jason exits their cabin to go find more victims. (Full reveal)
Chapter 5: Cabin Fever (Complete)
Popko, Lola, Coco and Rocki are playing cards (Popko is loosing badly)
Coco and Rocki decide to go find Jackson.
Lola & Popko take a break with Lola looking for the others while Popko makes some Popcorn.
The killer smashes Popko's head into the counter and then finished off with a meat cleaver.
Lola returns and the killer throws Popko's body for her to see.
Lola tries to escape only to be thrown through the large picture window. As she tries to crawl away she is lassoed around the neck, hung from a tree and is strangled to death.
Coco and Rocki split up, Coco heads to the Range and sees Ethan's dead body.
Chapter ends with Rocki discovering Gina and Brady's bodies.
Chapter 6: Cat and Mouse (Complete)
Coco hides in the Range Cabin after finding Ethan crucified on an archery target.
Rocki's scream of horror alerts the killer to her presence at the counselor's cabins.
Rocki manages to narrowly evade her attacker.
Co-Manager inadvertently draws killer away.
Rocki makes her way to the woods where she is saved by Jackson.
Chapter 7: Final Friday (Complete)
Coco almost kills Rocki (accidentally)
Jackson can't find his shotguns, Coco knows why.
The trio must work their way back to the barn the long way around through the woods.
Rocki stops Coco from setting off a signal wire. The group follows the wire to the killer's underground lair.
Jackson and their friends find Dee from the prologue. Jackson recognizes the girl as Denise, the daughter of the original killer. Dee tells the trio why she is alive while Jackson picks the lock.
The quartet makes their way to the barn with the shotgun shells.
Jason breaks in just as the counselor's finish loading and unloading on him.
Epilogue (Complete)
The girls and Jackson are holed up in the barn when Ben Willis and Veronica Warren return to find the blood bath that has occurred. Jackson holds the owner (who questions his presence) hostage demanding he explain to his niece and the women present what happened here three years ago as he is legally unable to himself. Coco records his confession.
Jackson returns home to Sienna who is awaiting the return of her love.
Sienna tells Jackson that she has been disowned by her father for refusing to break up with Jackson. Sienna has been living in the Fuller/Hale family basement for 2 weeks.
Jackson and Sienna take a trip together at Jackson's behest. On their return flight, they have a layover in Las Vegas where Jackson proposes to Sienna. The couple gets married with Jackson Promising to give her a proper wedding in 4 years. Sienna agrees and they are married.
Four years later Sienna is a popular model/agent running her own modeling agency. She is on the verge of stepping back from modeling and solely running her agency. The reason for this is she wants to start a family (she is already pregnant).
Jackson is opening his own tech firm and runs his aunt's & wife's websites.
The Kills Pt 2
Flunkie 1: Killed Offscreen
Flunkie 2: Neck Snapped
Drug Dealer: Shot through the head with an arrow
Buyer: Shot through the head with an arrow
Buyer GF: Injured in a bear trap, Impaled though the back of the head with a machete
BFF (Male): Crushed against a tree by Jason.
BFF (Female): Thought to be killed by Jason. Revealed to be alive near the end.
Ethan Edwards: Captured, broken, crucified on the archery range.
Ashlyn Neilsen: Booby Trap kill (strung up and gutted or spike trap, TBD)
Gina DeWitt: Run through with a machete and then bisected.
Austin Brady: Covered in Gina's blood, he is killed off-screen.
Bobby Popko: Head smashed into the counter several times and then hit with a cleaver in the back of the head.
Lola Wong: Thrown through a window then hung from a tree.
Co-Manager (TBD): Killed with an ax.
Jason Vorhees: Corners the last survivors in the barn where his mother died. Breaking through the door he comes face to face with prepared adversaries and is shot to death.
Camp Blood Timeline
June 2018: Events leading to LN@CB (Prologue)
July 13, 2018: Events of Long Night at Camp Blood (Ch 1 - 5)
July 14 – Aug 12, 2018: Jackson and Sienna bond while in San Jose, Ca.
March 13, 2020: The drug deal in the woods at Crystal Lake is interrupted by Jason Vorhees.
No Survivors(?) (Prologue II)
2021: J, R, R, S are 18
May 2021: Senior Prom
June (TBD), 2021: Camp Crystal Lake management comes to Bayview High.
August 13, 2021: Curse of Camp Blood (Ch 1-7)
August 14, 2021: Jackson settles his score with Ben Willis (Epilogue)
August (TBD), 2021: Jackson and Sienna go to New York to meet his Aunt Michelle. On the return trip, they elope.
2023: J, R, R, S are 20
2025: J, R, R, S are 25
August (TBD): Jackson and Sienna remarry
2026: Jackson & Sienna's daughter is born.
2028: Jackson & Sienna's son is born
2030: Jackson & Sienna's daughter is born
2044: The kids are told the tale of Camp Blood 1 & 2
2063: J, R, R, S are 60
June 15, 2063: Epilogue Story told from Grandpa Jackson & Grandma Sienna to their grandchildren.
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